Blog 9

Dear all, This is your task for week 9. Write a paragraph about: Does a person’s happiness depend on other people or on oneself? Make sure that you: §  State (manifest, declare) your main ideas (either that happiness depends on the individual or that happiness depends on others). §  Give reasons and examples to clearly answer the question. §  Use as well as, in addition, furthermore, or moreover to add ideas. Your post should be done in no less than 50 words. Write and publish it as soon as it is possible Deadline: Friday 13/05/2016

Read the paragraph below. Can you find mistakes? How many? Can you correct them

Sometimes, happiness is conditioned upon as the others transmit their feelings or emotions to you; however, the most relevant is that you must feel proud of yourself for all your achievements you have gotten and dedicate a “me” time. For instance, if you give the final speech in front of your promotion, you will feel proud of yourself for all your efforts to get that achievement. Even though your hard work is celebrated by your relatives, the most important is that you must internalize your accomplishment looking back all your background. In addition, you could enjoy going to parties and social meetings, and getting to know new friends as a way to keep in touch with human beings but sometimes, all our life and happiness need to be analyzed by oneself alone where the silence is our best company. To sum up, even though it is really important to socialize with other people and receive their acknowledgement for all our achievements, the most significant is that you feel proud of yourself and happy even if you are alone.. (Cisneros Deza Jorge Luis)

Hope it helps for your blog in Cambridge. Remember to read the unit before you starts writing.